Question
Read this sentence from a student essay:
First, they tend to have personas that they present to the public, often as a way to conceal the private aspects of their lives, well-rehearsed.
Which is the best revision to the sentence?
A. First, they tend to have well-rehearsed personas that they present to the public, often as a way to conceal the private aspects of their lives.
B. First, often as a way to conceal the private aspects of their lives, they tend to have personas that they present to the public well-rehearsed.
C. First, they present to the public that are well-rehearsed personas they tend to have, often as a way to conceal the private aspects of their lives.
D. First, they often, as a way to conceal the private aspects of their lives, tend to have personas that they present to the public that are well rehearsed.
First, they tend to have personas that they present to the public, often as a way to conceal the private aspects of their lives, well-rehearsed.
Which is the best revision to the sentence?
A. First, they tend to have well-rehearsed personas that they present to the public, often as a way to conceal the private aspects of their lives.
B. First, often as a way to conceal the private aspects of their lives, they tend to have personas that they present to the public well-rehearsed.
C. First, they present to the public that are well-rehearsed personas they tend to have, often as a way to conceal the private aspects of their lives.
D. First, they often, as a way to conceal the private aspects of their lives, tend to have personas that they present to the public that are well rehearsed.
Answers
GPT-4o mini
The best revision to the sentence is:
**A. First, they tend to have well-rehearsed personas that they present to the public, often as a way to conceal the private aspects of their lives.**
This option improves clarity by placing "well-rehearsed" directly before "personas," making the sentence flow better while maintaining the original meaning.
**A. First, they tend to have well-rehearsed personas that they present to the public, often as a way to conceal the private aspects of their lives.**
This option improves clarity by placing "well-rehearsed" directly before "personas," making the sentence flow better while maintaining the original meaning.