Question
DEBORAH: "Professor’s name is missing from heading."
How could the feedback above be improved or changed?
Adopt a more informal tone.
Use more specific language.
Comment on a larger issue first.
DEBORAH: "Good!"
How could the feedback above be improved or changed?
Focus more on grammatical errors than on positive aspects of the draft.
Develop a more authoritative tone.
Use more specific language.
DEBORAH: "Why is the last sentence in paragraph 2 (see underlining) important to readers? Why do they need to know that the Greeks saw Milo compete ’over half of their life’?"
Why is this effective feedback for the writer? Check all that apply.
It is clear and specific.
It focuses on important grammatical issues.
It asks a reader-based question.
It maintains an authoritative tone.
It addresses an important issue.
DEBORAH: "You need to cite your sources!"
The feedback above should be revisedto use an authoritative tone
How could the feedback above be improved or changed?
Adopt a more informal tone.
Use more specific language.
Comment on a larger issue first.
DEBORAH: "Good!"
How could the feedback above be improved or changed?
Focus more on grammatical errors than on positive aspects of the draft.
Develop a more authoritative tone.
Use more specific language.
DEBORAH: "Why is the last sentence in paragraph 2 (see underlining) important to readers? Why do they need to know that the Greeks saw Milo compete ’over half of their life’?"
Why is this effective feedback for the writer? Check all that apply.
It is clear and specific.
It focuses on important grammatical issues.
It asks a reader-based question.
It maintains an authoritative tone.
It addresses an important issue.
DEBORAH: "You need to cite your sources!"
The feedback above should be revisedto use an authoritative tone
Answers
GPT-4o mini
Here are some suggested revisions for Deborah's feedback in line with the provided criteria:
1. **Feedback about the missing professor's name:**
- **Revised Feedback:** "Hey, just a quick note! It looks like the professor's name isn't included in the heading. Make sure to add it for clarity."
2. **Feedback saying "Good!":**
- **Revised Feedback:** "This part is solid! However, there are a few grammatical options worth reviewing that could enhance the overall quality."
3. **Feedback about the importance of the last sentence in paragraph 2:**
- **Revised Feedback:** "This question is effective because it is clear and specific, prompting the writer to think critically about reader engagement. It also centers on the significance of the argument being made, which is crucial for strengthening the piece."
4. **Feedback about citing sources:**
- **Revised Feedback:** "It's essential to include citations for your sources to ensure that your work maintains academic integrity and credibility. Please make sure to add them."
This approach maintains clear communication while improving the tone and specificity of the feedback.
1. **Feedback about the missing professor's name:**
- **Revised Feedback:** "Hey, just a quick note! It looks like the professor's name isn't included in the heading. Make sure to add it for clarity."
2. **Feedback saying "Good!":**
- **Revised Feedback:** "This part is solid! However, there are a few grammatical options worth reviewing that could enhance the overall quality."
3. **Feedback about the importance of the last sentence in paragraph 2:**
- **Revised Feedback:** "This question is effective because it is clear and specific, prompting the writer to think critically about reader engagement. It also centers on the significance of the argument being made, which is crucial for strengthening the piece."
4. **Feedback about citing sources:**
- **Revised Feedback:** "It's essential to include citations for your sources to ensure that your work maintains academic integrity and credibility. Please make sure to add them."
This approach maintains clear communication while improving the tone and specificity of the feedback.