(1) Dana gulped nervously as she buckled her life jacket and pulled the straps tighter. (2) Standing on the sandy shore of the lake, she gazed out at its placid blue surface and tried not to dwell on its hidden depths.
(3) Her best friend Angela stood next to her, also putting on her life jacket but wearing a big smile on her face. (4) "It's about time we tried this," Angela said enous it, cal today ene per end hr a tea un. ole as alta it wed going
to rain earlier, but there isn't a cloud in the sky now."
(7) Dana bit her lip to keep from admitting that she had secretly hoped for rain.
(8) Of course, Angela was enthusiastic about paddleboarding; she was a natural athlete. (9) Dana, on the other hand, preferred indoor pursuits.
(10) Dana and Angela were neighbors, and while they had been close friends since childhood, they had recently noticed that they were having more and more trouble agreeing on what they wanted to do. (11) Every time they tried to spend a day together, it became a complex negotiation that took up far too much of their time.
(12) Finally, in desperation, they had agreed to take turns choosing their activities.
(13) Alternating can be a positive tool of compromise.
14) Angela's Aunt Maya, who had generously loaned the girls the equipment and ho would be accompanying them out on the lake, looked at Dana sympathetically nd said, "It's really easy when you get the hang of it." (15) Picking up a paddle, he side-to-side motion the girls would need to use to glide across the water while tanding on their boards is what she demonstrated. (16) Then, after telling each irl to kneel on her board, she launched them both onto the water and instructed, You can stand up after you paddle farther out."
17) This isn't so bad, Dana thought with surprise as she followed Angela toward the
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What is the MOST effective revision to make in sentence 15?
® She picked up a paddle while standing on their boards, demonstrating the side-to-side motion the girls would need to use to glide across the water.
© Picking up a paddle, she demonstrated what the girls would need to use to glide across the water while standing on their
boards, which was the side-to-side motion.
© She picked up a paddle, and she demonstrated that to glide across the water while standing on their boards that the girls
would need to use the side-to-side motion.
@ Picking up a paddle, she demonstrated the side-to-side motion the girls would need to use to glide across the water while
standing on their boards.
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The MOST effective revision to make in sentence 15 is:
@ Picking up a paddle, she demonstrated the side-to-side motion the girls would need to use to glide across the water while standing on their boards.
This option provides clarity and conciseness while maintaining the original meaning.
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