Your passage is generally clear, but there are some areas where repetition could be reduced and minor grammar adjustments could improve clarity. Here are some observations:
Repetition:
- Use of "variation": The word "variation" is used multiple times in close proximity. It might be helpful to use synonyms or rephrase some sentences to avoid redundancy.
Grammar and Clarity:
- Sentence Structure: The sentence "The headings that really caught my eye were 'Variation as an Element of Success' and 'Using Variation to Your Advantage' because showed me..." is missing a subject (the word "it" before "showed") which makes it a fragment. It should read, "...because it showed me..."
- Consistency in Pronouns: In the phrase "how no one needs a perfect body in order to become good at something," you might clarify what "something" refers to for better specificity.
- Punctuation: Ensure that the possessive apostrophe is used correctly (e.g., "the author’s purpose and point of view" is correct as is, but ensure consistency in other sentences as well).
Suggested Revision:
"The author’s point of view is that variation in our bodies is an essential element of success. I realized this while looking through the article’s headings, particularly 'Variation as an Element of Success' and 'Using Variation to Your Advantage.' These titles demonstrated the author's perspective that a perfect body is not necessary for achieving proficiency in any area. Understanding the author's purpose and viewpoint helped me grasp the topic better, as it emphasizes that individuality and variation can lead to success."
This revision reduces repetition and clarifies the message.