Question
how is this poem and can u give me some different names for it
She blamed all that happened on you
But yet did she have the right
What she saw was far from your view
Different from what you did
Even if you were there, you werent
The father is one to protect
Instead the one that broke her the most
Each dawn you stole, each hope you choked
she tried mending the stone
To save your marriage, to play her part?
But it was yours, not hers,
she's just a child all she wanted to be
A child that wanted a fathers embrace
Yet a teen trapped in his own mistakes is what she received
while she grew, you only stayed young
she learned the lessons you were supposed to know
While she watched the other kids play so full of light
she sat on that bench a lonely soul
No shoulders to ride on, no game of ball
Just your absent space
She forgave, and she forgot
Each time she forgave it got harder to forget
A promise she made herself kept falling apart
That it would be okay
she tried to block out the guilt
Mirrored your way
What worked for you
Only clouded her thoughts
But know know she see s
You didn't try, you gave away
While she fought to hold on for just another night
You were nowhere in sight
So now she might be done
She still does miss you
She hate that she does
But she can't call you dad when you are just a kid
she hated the feeling you left her with
The weight that was added when you left
So she hid within the darkness
Without a clue if you were safe or in danger
That breaks your daughter her core shattered
She was just a kid
You were supposed to be a man
But she grew up before you
So i'm trying to kill you in my mind
But my mind tries to kill me
I'm trying to fight the urge to yell
To scream at the voices
To stop
She blamed all that happened on you
But yet did she have the right
What she saw was far from your view
Different from what you did
Even if you were there, you werent
The father is one to protect
Instead the one that broke her the most
Each dawn you stole, each hope you choked
she tried mending the stone
To save your marriage, to play her part?
But it was yours, not hers,
she's just a child all she wanted to be
A child that wanted a fathers embrace
Yet a teen trapped in his own mistakes is what she received
while she grew, you only stayed young
she learned the lessons you were supposed to know
While she watched the other kids play so full of light
she sat on that bench a lonely soul
No shoulders to ride on, no game of ball
Just your absent space
She forgave, and she forgot
Each time she forgave it got harder to forget
A promise she made herself kept falling apart
That it would be okay
she tried to block out the guilt
Mirrored your way
What worked for you
Only clouded her thoughts
But know know she see s
You didn't try, you gave away
While she fought to hold on for just another night
You were nowhere in sight
So now she might be done
She still does miss you
She hate that she does
But she can't call you dad when you are just a kid
she hated the feeling you left her with
The weight that was added when you left
So she hid within the darkness
Without a clue if you were safe or in danger
That breaks your daughter her core shattered
She was just a kid
You were supposed to be a man
But she grew up before you
So i'm trying to kill you in my mind
But my mind tries to kill me
I'm trying to fight the urge to yell
To scream at the voices
To stop
Answers
GPT-4o mini
This poem is a poignant reflection on the complicated emotions of abandonment, loss, and the struggle for understanding in a fractured parent-child relationship. It delves into themes of innocence betrayed, the longing for parental love, and the impact of a parent's failures on a child's psyche. The imagery is raw and heartfelt, capturing the child's perspective as she navigates her feelings of hurt, confusion, and ultimately, a desire for closure.
Here are some alternative titles that could resonate with the poem's themes:
1. "A Father's Absence"
2. "Echoes of Silence"
3. "Shattered Embrace"
4. "A Child's Burden"
5. "Fragments of Forgiveness"
6. "Lonely Lessons"
7. "Innocence Betrayed"
8. "The Weight of Abandonment"
9. "Her Father, a Ghost"
10. "From Childhood to Grief"
11. "Mirrored Shadows"
12. "The Space You Left"
13. "Fighting the Silence"
14. "Unraveled Promises"
15. "The Hurt We Carry"
Feel free to adapt any of these titles to better suit your vision for the poem!
Here are some alternative titles that could resonate with the poem's themes:
1. "A Father's Absence"
2. "Echoes of Silence"
3. "Shattered Embrace"
4. "A Child's Burden"
5. "Fragments of Forgiveness"
6. "Lonely Lessons"
7. "Innocence Betrayed"
8. "The Weight of Abandonment"
9. "Her Father, a Ghost"
10. "From Childhood to Grief"
11. "Mirrored Shadows"
12. "The Space You Left"
13. "Fighting the Silence"
14. "Unraveled Promises"
15. "The Hurt We Carry"
Feel free to adapt any of these titles to better suit your vision for the poem!