I was telling my dad about how much I like starting a new notebook.
Which revision of this section of dialogue best shows the narrator’s feelings?
When I open the cover, the smell of fresh paper wafts up to greet me and the crisp, open page fills me with an exquisite sense of possibility.
When I first open the notebook, I take care to crease the cover gently so that it’s nice and flexible, and then I can enjoy writing without fussing.
I’m happy about the notebook because now I can get started on writing down the song that’s been floundering in my head all week.
I’m glad to have a new notebook because I’m hoping it will provide inspiration to start working on that short story that’s due in English soon.
1 answer
The revision that best shows the narrator’s feelings is:
"When I open the cover, the smell of fresh paper wafts up to greet me and the crisp, open page fills me with an exquisite sense of possibility."
This option effectively conveys the narrator's excitement and emotional connection to starting a new notebook by describing sensory details and the feelings of inspiration and possibility it evokes.
