Read the following sentences, which need revising, editing, and proofreading: Cocconut oil. Trendy. But healthy? Americans (72%) think so. Experts say not so fast: lots of fat, lots of calories, not enough proof of benefits. Which revision below is most effective? Coconut oil is trendy right now, but maybe it isn’t as healthy as 72% of Americans think. Experts think coconut oil has lots of fat and lots of calories, and there isn’t proof of benefits. 72% of Americans think coconut oil is healthy. Experts aren’t in that group, saying the trendy oil has fat and calories. Coconut oil is trendy, but is it healthy? While 72% of Americans think it’s better for you than other oils, nutritionists disagree. They say more research is needed to determine if the oil provides enough benefits to balance out its high fat and calorie content. Most Americans think coconut oil is healthy, but experts say it is bad for you because its high in fat and calories.

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The most effective revision among the options provided is:

Coconut oil is trendy, but is it healthy? While 72% of Americans think it’s better for you than other oils, nutritionists disagree. They say more research is needed to determine if the oil provides enough benefits to balance out its high fat and calorie content.

This revision is effective because it:

Clearly introduces the topic and poses a question (is it healthy?).
Provides statistics about public opinion (72% of Americans think it's healthy).
Introduces the expert perspective, highlighting disagreement with the public opinion.
States the need for further research, adding nuance to the discussion.
Maintains a logical flow and clarity while avoiding informal language.

Overall, it strikes a good balance between presenting facts and inviting critical thinking.