It seems you are looking for feedback on an analytical paragraph regarding the approaches of W.E.B. Du Bois and Booker T. Washington in advocating for African American civil rights and education. Based on your notes and suggestions, here’s a revised version of your paragraph that follows a more structured format:
Revised Paragraph:
W.E.B. Du Bois's approach to civil rights was more effective than that of Booker T. Washington because he advocated for immediate civil rights, higher education, and political representation for African Americans. As noted in Document D, Du Bois was a "lifelong advocate of world peace" and argued that "an educated black elite should lead blacks to liberation." This highlights Du Bois's belief in the necessity of higher education as a catalyst for social change and empowerment within the African American community. In contrast, Washington emphasized vocational training and economic independence, believing that hard work and gradual progress would ultimately lead to respect and rights. While Washington's approach aimed to improve the economic status of African Americans, Du Bois saw the need for political activism and civil rights as urgent. Thus, Du Bois’s call for immediate action and education not only addressed the social inequalities of the time but also inspired a generation of black leaders to advocate for civil rights, making his approach ultimately more effective.
Comments:
- This paragraph begins with a clear thesis statement that outlines the focus of your argument.
- Evidence from the documents is integrated to support the analysis without being overshadowed by the introduction.
- Each point is organized logically, with a clear connection to the overall argument regarding the effectiveness of Du Bois's approach compared to Washington's.
- Consider expanding on the implications of Du Bois's advocacy for contemporary movements or how they paved the way for future civil rights efforts to strengthen your analysis further.
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