Today, we need to think about the legacy we want to leave for future club members. I think we all want them to feel proud and included, so let’s make sure they do by implementing the changes suggested by our current members. It’s time to get your ballots and decide how you want to vote.

Question

Imagine a club president reading this statement at the end of a speech. Which revision most effectively improves the pace of delivery?

Today, we need to think about the legacy we want to leave for future club members. I think we all want them to feel proud and included, so let’s make sure they do by implementing the changes suggested by our current members. [Give a thumbs up.] It’s time to get your ballots and decide how you want to vote.

Today, we need to think about the legacy we want to leave for future club members . I think we all want them to feel proud and included, so let’s make sure they do by implementing the changes suggested by our current members. [Give a thumbs up.] It’s time to get your ballots and decide how you want to vote.

Today, do we want to think about the legacy we will leave behind for future club members? Do we want to help them feel proud and include by implementing the changes suggested by our members? It’s time to get out your ballots and decide how you want to vote.

Today, do we want to think about the legacy we will leave behind for future club members? Do we want to help them feel proud and include by implementing the changes suggested by our members? It’s time to get out your ballots and decide how you want to vote.

Today, we need to think about the legacy we want to leave behind. We want future members to feel proud. We want them to feel included. Let’s make sure they do! We can if we choose to implement the changes suggested by our members. It’s time to vote!

Today, we need to think about the legacy we want to leave behind. We want future members to feel proud. We want them to feel included. Let’s make sure they do! We can if we choose to implement the changes suggested by our members. It’s time to vote!

Today, we need to think about the legacy we want to leave for future club members. If we want them to feel proud and included, let’s make sure they do by implementing the changes suggested by our current members. Who is ready to get out your ballots and vote?

Answer 1

The revision that most effectively improves the pace of delivery is the last option:

"Today, we need to think about the legacy we want to leave for future club members. If we want them to feel proud and included, let’s make sure they do by implementing the changes suggested by our current members. Who is ready to get out your ballots and vote?"

This version maintains a clear and direct structure, using concise sentences that flow well and encourage engagement. The ending question "Who is ready to get out your ballots and vote?" creates a call to action that can energize the audience and prompt immediate participation.