Question

Is this alright as my 'hooking' beginning?

We find it mixed in our food on the shelves in the supermarket, we find it growing in a plot down the lane, test field release sites with genetically engineered rape seed, sugar beet, wheat, potato, strawberries and more. It is variously known as genetic engineering, which is a technology in which the genome of a living cell is modified for medical or industrial use. It’s used in our everyday life in agriculture, medicine, and industry.

-MC

Answer 1

That's a good hook -- IF you cut it in half. As a hook, it's too long. I got tired of reading half way through.

Answer 2

We find it mixed in our food on the shelves in the supermarket and growing in a plot down the lane. It is variously known as genetic engineering, which is a technology in which the genome of a living cell is modified for medical or industrial use. It’s used in our everyday life in agriculture, medicine, and industry. The question is: Is it a blessing, or a threat? [thesis]

Better? And is my thesis alright?

-MC

Answer 3

For your thesis, you need to decide which side of the question you support.

Answer 4

Tough decision..

-MC