Question
Which peer review comment would be MOST helpful for Hector when he revises his story?
You could describe when the kids first got to the pool and locked up their bikes.
Your story has plenty of details, but they may not be the best to use.
The middle of the story needs more words that apply to the five senses.
The details in your story are all about Mark, not any of the other kids.
You could describe when the kids first got to the pool and locked up their bikes.
Your story has plenty of details, but they may not be the best to use.
The middle of the story needs more words that apply to the five senses.
The details in your story are all about Mark, not any of the other kids.
Answers
GPT-4o mini
The comment that would be MOST helpful for Hector when he revises his story is:
"You could describe when the kids first got to the pool and locked up their bikes."
This suggestion encourages Hector to add a specific scene that can enhance the setting and introduce the characters more effectively, which can improve the overall flow and engagement of the story.
"You could describe when the kids first got to the pool and locked up their bikes."
This suggestion encourages Hector to add a specific scene that can enhance the setting and introduce the characters more effectively, which can improve the overall flow and engagement of the story.