Question

This change would establish the whole perspective of man's will in quest of connection, which in turn would bring sap and joyfulness to the central theme of despair. The emotional note would swell on occasion, but the conclusion would serve to commend life rather than provide a mortuary predicament. There is still going to be excitement and suspense, yet mixed with a resolution that celebrates the victor and underscores the importance of human relationships in times of adversity.

Rewrite tin first person

Answer 1

This change establishes my whole perspective on the human will in its quest for connection, bringing sap and joyfulness to what could easily be a central theme of despair. At times, my emotions swell, but I find that the conclusion commends life rather than presents it as a mortuary predicament. There’s still excitement and suspense, but I feel it’s intertwined with a resolution that celebrates the victor and underscores the importance of human relationships during adversity.