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Read the following description and consider how a writer could use dialogue to develop the characters and their relationship in this scene. Kanan and Shyla are brother and sister. They stand at the edge of the water and look out into the ocean. Kanan is afraid of the waves. Shyla is an excellent swimmer and is ready to dive in. Source: activity Use what you have learned about developing character to revise this scene. Add dialogue and description to make the scene more engaging and to further develop the two characters. The dialogue should convey the characters’ feelings and suggest how they interact.
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Kanan stood at the water's edge, his toes curled in the damp sand as he watched the waves crash and recede. His heart raced in rhythm with the turbulent surf. Shyla, a few steps behind him, toyed absentmindedly with a long piece of seaweed, her eyes gleaming with excitement.
"Come on, Kanan! The water's perfect today!" Shyla called out, her voice light and teasing, as she flicked the seaweed playfully in his direction.
Kanan flinched, instinctively stepping back, his gaze fixed on a particularly large wave that rolled ominously toward them. "Perfect? It looks like it wants to swallow me whole!" he replied, forcing a nervous chuckle.
Shyla rolled her eyes, a grin breaking across her face. "You just have to trust the water. It won’t bite. Remember when I took you out last summer? You had so much fun once you got the hang of it."
"Yeah, after I almost drowned!" Kanan shuddered, recalling the panic that had seized him then. He glanced at the ocean, a wild dance of blue and white, and shuffled his feet in the sand.
Shyla stepped closer, her voice softer now. "Kanan, it’s okay to be scared, but you know I wouldn’t let anything happen to you. Trust me. What if I swim out a little ways and wave back? You can see how easy it is from here."
Kanan bit his lip, uncertainty clouding his eyes. “What if you get pulled out too far? What if you don’t come back?” The worry clawed at him, a familiar feeling that had become a brotherly instinct.
“Hey,” Shyla said gently, her voice steady and reassuring. She placed a hand on his shoulder, grounding him. “I’m the best swimmer I know. Just like you’re the best with the video games. You’ve got nothing to worry about. Just look at the rhythm of the waves.” She nodded toward the ocean, her confidence radiating off her.
Kanan let out a shaky breath. “I just wish I could feel the same way,” he admitted, vulnerability cracking through his bravado.
Shyla squeezed his shoulder, a spark of sibling mischief in her eyes. “You can, you know. Just take a few steps in. I promise I won’t let you go under. And if you do, I’ll swim down and drag you back up.”
His lips curled into a hesitant smile, and he finally turned to face her fully. “You just want to show off your skills, don't you?”
“Maybe,” she winked. “But I also want to share something I love with my favorite brother. What do you say? Just a toe dip to start?”
Kanan glanced back at the waves, then at her hopeful expression. He felt the warmth of her encouragement bolstering his resolve. “Okay… just a toe dip,” he relented, stepping toward the water, his breathing steadier.
“See! That's the spirit!" Shyla beamed, walking beside him. “And if you start to freak out, I'll be right here. One wave at a time, alright?”
Kanan gave a slight nod, and together they approached the water, the bond between them twinkling like the sunlight on the ocean’s surface.
"Come on, Kanan! The water's perfect today!" Shyla called out, her voice light and teasing, as she flicked the seaweed playfully in his direction.
Kanan flinched, instinctively stepping back, his gaze fixed on a particularly large wave that rolled ominously toward them. "Perfect? It looks like it wants to swallow me whole!" he replied, forcing a nervous chuckle.
Shyla rolled her eyes, a grin breaking across her face. "You just have to trust the water. It won’t bite. Remember when I took you out last summer? You had so much fun once you got the hang of it."
"Yeah, after I almost drowned!" Kanan shuddered, recalling the panic that had seized him then. He glanced at the ocean, a wild dance of blue and white, and shuffled his feet in the sand.
Shyla stepped closer, her voice softer now. "Kanan, it’s okay to be scared, but you know I wouldn’t let anything happen to you. Trust me. What if I swim out a little ways and wave back? You can see how easy it is from here."
Kanan bit his lip, uncertainty clouding his eyes. “What if you get pulled out too far? What if you don’t come back?” The worry clawed at him, a familiar feeling that had become a brotherly instinct.
“Hey,” Shyla said gently, her voice steady and reassuring. She placed a hand on his shoulder, grounding him. “I’m the best swimmer I know. Just like you’re the best with the video games. You’ve got nothing to worry about. Just look at the rhythm of the waves.” She nodded toward the ocean, her confidence radiating off her.
Kanan let out a shaky breath. “I just wish I could feel the same way,” he admitted, vulnerability cracking through his bravado.
Shyla squeezed his shoulder, a spark of sibling mischief in her eyes. “You can, you know. Just take a few steps in. I promise I won’t let you go under. And if you do, I’ll swim down and drag you back up.”
His lips curled into a hesitant smile, and he finally turned to face her fully. “You just want to show off your skills, don't you?”
“Maybe,” she winked. “But I also want to share something I love with my favorite brother. What do you say? Just a toe dip to start?”
Kanan glanced back at the waves, then at her hopeful expression. He felt the warmth of her encouragement bolstering his resolve. “Okay… just a toe dip,” he relented, stepping toward the water, his breathing steadier.
“See! That's the spirit!" Shyla beamed, walking beside him. “And if you start to freak out, I'll be right here. One wave at a time, alright?”
Kanan gave a slight nod, and together they approached the water, the bond between them twinkling like the sunlight on the ocean’s surface.