There was a moment of silence. Everyone seemed unsure whether to laugh or take the announcement seriously. If what they’d said over the loudspeaker was true, everything was about to change.
Which revision would introduce a simile to make the description more vivid?
(1 point)
Responses
add “that lasted ages” after “silence”
add “that lasted ages” after “silence”
add “as thick as syrup” after “a moment of silence”
add “as thick as syrup” after “a moment of silence”
add “intense” after “a moment of”
add “intense” after “a moment of”
add “hysterically” after “laugh”
1 answer
The best revision that would introduce a simile to make the description more vivid is:
add “as thick as syrup” after “a moment of silence”
This revision creates a more vivid image of the silence by comparing it to something familiar, enhancing the reader's understanding of the atmosphere.
