Question

Formal Style and Objective Tone


You have been assigned to compose an essay in which you discuss an event while maintaining a formal style and an objective tone.
Question 1
Which sentence would NOT be acceptable for the assigned essay?
Responses
A Before the game began, anticipation mounted.Before the game began, anticipation mounted.
B In an exciting and hotly-contested battle, the home team emerged victorious.In an exciting and hotly-contested battle, the home team emerged victorious.
C I could hardly contain myself and I screamed loudly as the final goal was scored.I could hardly contain myself and I screamed loudly as the final goal was scored.
D The fans rooted lustily for their beloved team, but at first victory seemed elusive.The fans rooted lustily for their beloved team, but at first victory seemed elusive.

Answer 1

The sentence that would NOT be acceptable for the assigned essay is:

C. I could hardly contain myself and I screamed loudly as the final goal was scored.

This sentence contains a subjective perspective and personal emotion, which is inconsistent with the formal style and objective tone required for the essay.