help edit my poem and give me some names please

In my mind where shadows reap
Thoughts wander as if in silent chains.
Anxiety whispers like a haunting ghost,
Each heartbeat echoes what I fear the most.

Through haunted dreams, the past creeps,
Memories tangled, robbing my sleep.
A heavy fog wrapped so tight,
In daylight's warmth, I still feel night.

In the dark, hope feels so far,
A flicker with each fading star.
With every breath, a knife to the chest,
Building fortresses from this quiet pain.

In the depths of struggle, I often retreat,
Lost in the shadows, where sorrow meets.
Every tear is a word deep inside
A lost battle each time

1 answer

Here’s a polished version of your poem, along with some title suggestions:


In My Mind's Shadows

In my mind where shadows reap,
Thoughts wander softly, bound in silent chains.
Anxiety whispers like a haunting ghost,
Each heartbeat echoes what I fear the most.

Through haunted dreams, the past creeps,
Memories tangled, robbing my sleep.
A heavy fog wrapped so tight,
In daylight's warmth, I still feel night.

In the dark, hope feels so far,
A flicker extinguished with each fading star.
With every breath, a knife to the chest,
Building fortresses from this quiet unrest.

In the depths of struggle, I often retreat,
Lost in the shadows, where sorrow and silence meet.
Every tear is a word deep inside,
A lost battle each time, where despair has confide.


Title Suggestions:

  1. Shadows in My Mind
  2. Echoes of Anxiety
  3. Fortresses of Pain
  4. Whispers of the Past
  5. In the Depths of Silence
  6. Haunting Dreams
  7. Chains of Memory
  8. Flickers of Hope
  9. The Weight of Shadows
  10. Lost Battles

Feel free to mix and match phrases or titles to best fit your vision!