Asked by Claire

This begins with the titan Cronos’ mother, Earth, who encourages her children to overthrow their father, Heaven, because out of dislike, he keeps them locked away.

does this look right?
Answered by Writeacher
WAY too complicated.

You'd be better off to divide it into two sentences.
Answered by Claire
Thank you!
Answered by Writeacher
You're welcome. Concise and straightforward is always more understandable for your readers.

http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/concise.htm
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