Question

Well can i include that i think this is an interesting topic to study because you know about the different views.

Can i add that to the statement?

Answer 1

Would you please post your outline? It's pretty hard to tell much about a thesis statement without knowing what you plan to include in the entire paper.

Planning is somewhat back and forth -- from drafting thesis to writing outline to refining thesis to refining outline, etc.

Please post your outline.

Answer 2

And please do not use the word, "interesting." It's so trite and overused that it is virtually meaningless.

Answer 3

What word should i use instead of interesting? I will be thinking of some words aswell.