Asked by tash

i need help. How would you fix these sentences?


3. With machetes, the explores cut their way through the tall grasses to the edge of the canyon. Then they began to lay out the tapes for the survey.


4. The owners of the online grocery store rented a warehouse in the Market district. An area catering to small businesses.


5. If a woman from the desert tribe showed anger toward her husband, she was whipped in front of the whole village. And shunned by the rest of the women.
Answered by Writeacher
First of all, I need you to let me know what YOU THINK is wrong with each one.

Hint: #s 4 and 5 have the same problem as in this post of yours:
http://www.jiskha.com/display.cgi?id=1266357021
Answered by Ms. Sue
Writeacher has helped you with two or three sentences. Now it's your turn.

Please post your corrections, and we'll be glad to check them.

Answered by tash
who are you????
Answered by tash
who are you too?????
Answered by Writeacher
We are both teachers ... and we're waiting for your response.
Answered by tash
3. With machetes, the explorers cut their way through the tall grasses to the edge of the canyon, and then they began to lay out the tapes for the survey.
4. The owners of the online grocery rented a warehouse in the Market district, an area catering to small businesses.
5. If a woman from the desert tribe showed anger toward her husband, she was whipped in front of the whole village and shunned by the rest of the women.
Answered by Writeacher
Yes, those are all fine.
Answered by tash
1. Death Valley National Monument, located in Southern California and Nevada, is one of the hottest place on earth, temperatures there have soared as high as 134 degrees Fahrenheit.
Answered by Writeacher
I see a comma splice in there. How will you fix it?

http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/runons.htm#splice
Answered by tash
Death Valley National Monument located in Southern California and Nevada, is one of the hottest place on earth. temperatures there have soared as high as 134 degrees Fahrenheit.
Answered by Writeacher
The period after "earth" is correct, but what else needs to happen?
Answered by tash
capitalize T in temperatures?
Answered by Writeacher
Right.
Answered by tash
on this sentence, i've having a hard time

Subatomic physics is filled with strange and marvelous particles, tiny bodies of matter that shiver, wobble, pulse, and flatten to no thickness at all
Answered by Writeacher
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/marks/dash.htm

Given the explanation here, I'd put a dash (not a hyphen) after "particles" and keep all the rest of the commas.

You could also put a colon after "particles" but I think the dash is better.
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/marks/colon.htm
Answered by Anthony.
for the sentence "Death Valley...Fahrenheit". Would the following correction be okay.. 1. Death Valley National Monument, located in southern California and Nevada, is one of the hottest places on Earth with temperatures that have soared as high as 134°Fahrenhait.
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