'You're Abraham Lincoln's campaign manager. Your job is to convince the public to elect him sixteenth president of the US. Write an appeal to voters--to be printed in newspapers around the country--urging them to vote for him. "Sell" Lincoln to the public by emphasizing his qualifications: his character, background, achievements, and plans for the country's future.'

Question

Is this alright?

Vote for Abraham Lincoln to be the next president of the United States and you won’t regret it! Lincoln was born in Hardin County, Kentucky on February 12, 1809. He moved to Indiana in 1816 and lived there the rest of his youth. His mother died when he was nine but he was very close to his stepmother who urged him to read. Lincoln worked as a clerk before joining the military. He ran for the state legislature and lost in 1832. Mr. Lincoln has studied law and was admitted to the bar in 1836. He served as a US Representative (1847-49). He was elected to the state legislature in 1854 but resigned to run for the US Senate.
If Abraham Lincoln does become president, this country will see remarkable progress: the wars will be stopped, and the people will have more rights. Moreover, this man is very kind and broad-minded; the peoples’ ideas will not be overseen with Mr. Lincoln as our president, so cast your vote today!

-MC

Answer 1

When you're trying to sell something (or someone) use only positive words, not negative words. For instance, I was turned off by your first sentence, "you won't regret it."

Next, biographies do not sell candidates to voters. Give the voters reasons to elect him. You made a stab at it in the end but it's much to general.

What wars will be stopped? What specific progress will be made. Who will have more rights? What rights? Be specific.

I don't care if he is "kind." Hitler was supposedly "kind" to his dog!

And what do this mean? ". . . the peoples’ ideas will not be overseen with Mr. Lincoln as our president, . . ."

Answer 2

The last sentence means that he will consider all ideas that the people of the US give to him, and he won't ignore any complaints. how can i write that in a better way?

Thanks
-MC

Answer 3

Hmmmm. My ancestors, in Texas, would probably have voted Lincoln. Lincoln was in a moderate camp which advocated a Constitutional Amendment to guarantee the South could keep slavery, and that Congress should pass on law changing that. This is about all the South wanted, in fact. You should be putting that forward in your Lincoln pitch.
However, many, many Texans did not trust the Republican Party then, as it was also the party of the abolitionists.

http://www.tulane.edu/~latner/Background/BackgroundElection.html

Answer 4

I think you mean the peoples' ideas will not be overlooked by Lincoln.

A better way of saying that might be: Lincoln will seriously consider everyone's ideas.

Answer 5

OK, thank you

-MC