Question

Can someone help me understand how to remove the 'passive voice' from the following Conclusion?
Included in the preceding paper is a comprehensive discussion on the takeover target of Wal-mart. The identification of any lenders that Wal-mart uses and the role each plays in the organization are included. The investment bank used to issue stock and its’ role in the organization is identified. Also included is a discussion of which government entities are responsible for regulating the securities that Wal-mart uses and the role that these entities play for investors is examined. Wal-mart is deemed to be a very strong takeover target.

Answer 1

"The identification of any lenders that Wal-mart uses and the role each plays in the organization are included."

<b>The passive verb above is "are included." One way to change this sentence:

It identifies any lenders that Wal-mart uses and the role each plays.</b>

"The investment bank used to issue stock and its’ role in the organization is identified."

<b>The passive voice verb above is "is identified."</b>

" Also included is a discussion of which government entities are responsible for regulating the securities that Wal-mart uses and the role that these entities play for investors is examined."

<b>The passive voice verb is "is examined."

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Answer 2

In the preceding paper, Team B included a comprehensive discussion on the takeover target of Wal-mart. The Team identified of any lenders that Wal-mart uses and the role each plays in the organization. The Team also named the investment bank used by Wal-mart to issue stock and identified the role the bank plays in the organization. Team B also included a discussion of which government entities are responsible for regulating the securities that Wal-mart uses and examined the role that these entities play for investors. Wal-mart is a very strong takeover target for the organization that Team B represents.