Asked by helen
                There was another book my father had bought for me when I was a girl-- A picture book about the Trojan War, it reenacted the lives of the Ancient Greeks fighting in Troy
The "a girl-- A picture book..." is bugging me. Is the punctuation correct?
            
        The "a girl-- A picture book..." is bugging me. Is the punctuation correct?
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                    Answered by
            Writeacher
            
    No, it's not, and there's a problem with the comma after "War" too. This would be better:
There was another book my father had bought for me when I was a girl. It was a picture book about the Trojan War in which I learned about the lives of the Ancient Greeks fighting in Troy.
OR
There was another book my father had bought for me when I was a girl -- a picture book about the Trojan War. It reenacted the lives of the Ancient Greeks fighting in Troy.
[although, honestly, I can't figure out how a book could reenact anything!]
    
There was another book my father had bought for me when I was a girl. It was a picture book about the Trojan War in which I learned about the lives of the Ancient Greeks fighting in Troy.
OR
There was another book my father had bought for me when I was a girl -- a picture book about the Trojan War. It reenacted the lives of the Ancient Greeks fighting in Troy.
[although, honestly, I can't figure out how a book could reenact anything!]
                    Answered by
            helen
            
    Yes, I like the second one. And I will try to find a better word for reenact.
    
                    Answered by
            Writeacher
            
    The word "depict" would work, as would most of its synonyms:
To present a lifelike image of; delineate, describe, express, image, limn, picture, portray, render, represent, show.
http://www.answers.com/depict
    
To present a lifelike image of; delineate, describe, express, image, limn, picture, portray, render, represent, show.
http://www.answers.com/depict
                    Answered by
            helen
            
    portrayed perhaps? but depict sounds good thank you!
    
                    Answered by
            Writeacher
            
    You're very welcome. =)
    
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