Question

This is what I've added to my expository essay on Phoebe Winterbottom to show a little more about her character:

When Phoebe does accepts her mother in the end, the reader sees a different side of her. After Mrs.Winterbottom leaves, Phoebe’s fear that her mother might not love her is made obvious, as it wasn’t in the beginning of the story when she was irritated by her. In the end, when she accepts Mrs.Winterbottom and her son, you see the affectionate side of Phoebe. Overall, I think Phoebe is a mysterious character; you don’t see how her personality is right away, you have to read on and understand her.

Is this OK?

Thanks
-MC

Answer 1

I think you can do better.

Please go through the long list of character traits that I posted, and decide upon three or four that apply to Phoebe.

Answer 2

And after I choose three or four...put them in a paragraph to describe her?

-MC