Skeletally, it's OK. Now you need to add some details to prove you know what you're writing about!
What situations didn't include enough details?
What parts of the complication were irrelevant?
How could the resolution have been better?
When you answer each of the above questions, use PLENTY OF DETAILS, not simply more of the same generalized statements. Use specifics from the story for the first two questions; use specifics from your expectations for the third.
Give an example of a story, novel, or film that lacks a strong basic situation, complication, climax, or resolution. Describe how this lack affected your enjoyment of the work. It should be atleast a paragraph long.
This is what I have:
I think The Secret Garden by Frances Hodgson Burnett had a complicated story structure. The situations leading to the climax didn't include enough details to portray the story. Some parts of the complication were irrelevant to the story line, and I think the resolution didn't fully resolve the problem in the situation. I wasn't as interested in the book as I would be normally, thus it made it more difficult to continue.
Is this OK?
Thanks
-MC
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The problem is, I read this story a long time ago so I don't exactly remember all the details >.<
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Alright, this is what I got after trying to expand it:
I think The Secret Garden by Frances Hodgson Burnett had a complicated story structure. The situations leading to the climax didn't include enough details to portray the story and I had trouble picturing in my head what was happening because of the simple language use. Some parts of the complication were irrelevant to the story line, and I think the resolution didn't fully resolve the problem in the situation. I wasn't as interested in the book as I would be normally, because this book wasn’t pulling my attention and this made it more difficult to continue.
-MC
I think The Secret Garden by Frances Hodgson Burnett had a complicated story structure. The situations leading to the climax didn't include enough details to portray the story and I had trouble picturing in my head what was happening because of the simple language use. Some parts of the complication were irrelevant to the story line, and I think the resolution didn't fully resolve the problem in the situation. I wasn't as interested in the book as I would be normally, because this book wasn’t pulling my attention and this made it more difficult to continue.
-MC
Still no details?? Your sentence structure and grammar, usage, spelling are all fine, but I'd give this a D or so because it's all so vague.
=/ I'll try
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You may have to go back and reread the story. It never hurts to do that.
http://www.google.com/search?hl=en&as_q=The+Secret+Garden+by+Frances+Hodgson+Burnett&as_epq=&as_oq=&as_eq=&num=10&lr=&as_filetype=&ft=i&as_sitesearch=&as_qdr=all&as_rights=&as_occt=any&cr=&as_nlo=&as_nhi=&safe=images
http://www.google.com/search?hl=en&as_q=The+Secret+Garden+by+Frances+Hodgson+Burnett&as_epq=&as_oq=&as_eq=&num=10&lr=&as_filetype=&ft=i&as_sitesearch=&as_qdr=all&as_rights=&as_occt=any&cr=&as_nlo=&as_nhi=&safe=images
That's what im gonna have to do.
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I am reminded of a Preacher I knew who bragged from the Pulpit all during school, he only read one book, in the fourth grade, about a boy and his dog. Thereafter, each year, he wrote a book report on that book. He said the teachers never caught on.
He also one sermon was preaching from Revelation how anxious he was to get to the portholes of Heaven, and enter. My wife said outloud in the service: "Portals, Portals, not portholes. Heaven is not a ship".
I don't think he got the connection with reading regularly and language development. He is dead now, died of cancer. I have often wondered if he was surprised when he got to heaven, and there were no portholes to enter.
Reread the book. Don't watch the movie.
He also one sermon was preaching from Revelation how anxious he was to get to the portholes of Heaven, and enter. My wife said outloud in the service: "Portals, Portals, not portholes. Heaven is not a ship".
I don't think he got the connection with reading regularly and language development. He is dead now, died of cancer. I have often wondered if he was surprised when he got to heaven, and there were no portholes to enter.
Reread the book. Don't watch the movie.