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Mosquitoes are the largest disseminated insects. They are found anywhere; they can be found on verandas, balconies steps, and many other places. They are at their best when behind bed curtains; this is where they delight at their successful conflicts. Naturalists enjoy observing mosquitoes it is a delight for them to see its four pairs of eyes with double refracting lenses, which the light glitters from. Their gossamer wings and their articulation of sixteen legs is a joy to see.
I am not quite sure how to put it all down, and i need all the info i put down can maybe you help me re write it and help me to think of a better way to reword it all cuz it does not make sense to me at all thanks!
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Mosquitoes are the <b>most prevalent</b> insects. They are found <b>almost everywhere</b>; they can be found on verandas, <b>balcony</b> steps, and many other places. They are at their best<b><~~best??</b> when behind bed curtains; this is where they delight <b>in</b>their successful conflicts. Naturalists enjoy observing mosquitoes<b><~~run-on</b> it is a delight for them<b><~~them=?? mosquitoes or naturalists?</b> to see its<b><~~its??</b> four pairs of eyes with double refracting lenses, <b><~~from</b>which the light glitters. Their gossamer wings and their articulation of sixteen legs is<b><~~subject/verb agreement issue here</b> a joy to see.<b><~~joyful for whom? !!</b>
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/runons.htm
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/pronouns1.htm
Pay attention to pronoun-antecedent items.
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/sv_agr.htm
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I am not quite sure how to put it all down, and i need all the info i put down can maybe you help me re write it and help me to think of a better way to reword it all cuz it does not make sense to me at all thanks!
Some suggestions:
Mosquitoes are the <b>most prevalent</b> insects. They are found <b>almost everywhere</b>; they can be found on verandas, <b>balcony</b> steps, and many other places. They are at their best<b><~~best??</b> when behind bed curtains; this is where they delight <b>in</b>their successful conflicts. Naturalists enjoy observing mosquitoes<b><~~run-on</b> it is a delight for them<b><~~them=?? mosquitoes or naturalists?</b> to see its<b><~~its??</b> four pairs of eyes with double refracting lenses, <b><~~from</b>which the light glitters. Their gossamer wings and their articulation of sixteen legs is<b><~~subject/verb agreement issue here</b> a joy to see.<b><~~joyful for whom? !!</b>
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/runons.htm
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/pronouns1.htm
Pay attention to pronoun-antecedent items.
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/sv_agr.htm
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