Hi Matt,
Based on the information provided, it seems like you have a good understanding of the topic and are on the right track. However, there are a few areas you can improve on:
1. Repetition: As you mentioned, the first three sentences are repetitive. It's important to eliminate unnecessary repetition in your paper to make it more concise and focused.
2. Lack of explanation for the third question: You mentioned that the first two questions were covered nicely, but the paper is lacking an explanation for the third question about the desire for liberation from earthly existence. You could explore concepts such as moksha and samsara, which are central to Hindu beliefs and the desire for liberation.
3. Theological structure and henotheism: While you briefly mentioned the collection of different beliefs and traditions in Hinduism, it is also important to discuss the theological structure of the religion. Hinduism is often described as henotheistic, where there is recognition of one supreme deity while acknowledging the existence of other gods and goddesses as manifestations or forms of the supreme deity. This aspect of Hinduism explains its adaptability and acceptance of different faiths.
To improve your paper, you can further research and expand on these points. The website you provided (http://www.religioustolerance.org/hinduism2.htm) can be a helpful resource for developing your ideas.
Overall, it seems like you have a good foundation, and with some additional research and expansion on key points, you'll be able to create a strong 700-1000 word paper that follows APA guidelines.
Good luck with your paper!