Question

Q: Do you think that having an understanding of cultural differences and personality differences would be beneficial? Why or why not?

A:I believe having an understanding of both cultural differnces and personality differnces can be benificial. I say this because having the understanding of both differences when you have this knowledge, you can appeal to a person better when making a positive first impression. I also think that our personality differences have some relation to our cultural differences.


I would like to know am I missing something? Do I need to add anything to this statement.

Answer 1

I believe having an understanding of both cultural differnces and personality differnces can be benificial. <b>OK, I'm expecting some good details to explain this sentence. (Watch the spelling -- "differences")</b>

I say this because having the understanding of both differences when you have this knowledge, you can appeal to a person better when making a positive first impression. <b>What? No details about what "cultural differences" means? about what "personality differences" means?</b>

I also think that our personality differences have some relation to our cultural differences. <b>OK, I'm still waiting for those details.

You have written three very vague sentences. The first one isn't bad, but the second and third don't really add any information -- just rephrasing of the same ideas.

You need to include some specific examples of what you mean. Otherwise, this is just so much air.
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