Hello, I've always struggled with making a strong thesis in the start of my paragraph.

Question

I had two claims : 1. Both Christianity and Buddhism became widespread using missionary and conquests.
2. Christianity and Buddhism both became widespread because religion made lower class feel equal.

And I just don't know how to put those two claims in to a thesis, I've been struggling on this for a while.

Answer 1

I like your first statement better.

Missionaries and conquests spread both Christianity and Buddhism.

Answer 2

I would reword it..
Christianity and Buddhism were spread by missionaries and conquests.