Asked by Thi.

I just went to buy some groceries to cook supper when I come home to see my beloved husband on the floor. I was shocked and horrified to even think
what happened.

Can someone check if my grammar, punctuation is alright? Also can someone help me to make my sentence even stronger .
Answered by Writeacher
I went to buy some groceries for supper, but when I came home, my beloved husband was on the floor. I was shocked and horrified to even think about what had happened.

Make sure you understand every change I made. If you cannot duplicate this in class, your teacher will know you aren't doing your own work!
Answered by Thi.
Thank you ! Also I need help rewording this because I found this on a website and I want to change it into my own words but the sentence is already simplified.

Detective Patrick Maloney was murdered last Monday night in his own home, no suspects have been found yet; search for the murder weapon was unsuccessful.
Answered by Writeacher
Nope! I did the first one for you. Now it's your turn.

Pay attention to these things:

comma splice: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/runons.htm#splice

use of semicolons: http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/grammar/marks/semicolon.htm
Answered by Samuel
Last Monday, Patrick Maloney was killed, but there were no suspects nor a murder weapon found.
Answered by Writeacher
...nor was a murder weapon found.
Answered by Samuel
Yes, nor is a transition word.
Answered by Samuel
''Nor was' is not necessary.
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