Both Egypt and Mesopotamia developed an organized government that consisted of one ruler maintaining order, but Egypt had a centralized authority while Mesopotamian political powers was more distributed among all the city-states.

Question

This is a topic sentence to a paragraph. can you help me put this in a better clarifying sentence. I was wondering if i could put a semicolon in there somewhere.

Answer 1

You've added too many details for this to be a topic sentence for one paragraph. Just write this:

Ancient Egypt and Mesopotamia had very different types of governments.

The details belong in the supporting sentences, not the topic sentence.