This restaurant carries several kinds of street food such as odeng, tteokbokki, pretzels, beaver tails, waffles, and stick food. Odeng is fish cake. An odeng is 500 won. Both a long odeng and a flat odeng are 500 won. A tteokbokki is 500 won as well. A bungoeppang is 500 won. A pretzel is 1,000 won. A beaver tail is 2,000 won. A Brussels waffle is 3,000 won. A fruit stick is 2,000 won. An insect stick is 2,000 won. A meat stick is 3,000 won. A starfish stick is 1,000 won. Walk out from the school gate. Turn left and walk a little. Then turn right. You can see a stationery store on your left. Across from the stationery store is the famous restaurant. The restaurant has such street foods. Many people visit the restaurant, so sometimes you have to stand in line to eat the food there. I sometimes go there with my close friends when I get allowance from my parents. That's all. Thank you for your listening.

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This restaurant carries several kinds of street food such as odeng, tteokbokki, pretzels, beaver tails, waffles, and stick food. Odeng is fish cake. An odeng is 500 won. Both a long odeng and a flat odeng are 500 won. A tteokbokki is 500 won as well. A bungoeppang is 500 won. A pretzel is 1,000 won. A beaver tail is 2,000 won. A Brussels waffle is 3,000 won. A fruit stick is 2,000 won. An insect stick is 2,000 won. A meat stick is 3,000 won. A starfish stick is 1,000 won. Walk out from the school gate. Turn left and walk a little. Then turn right. You can see a stationery store on your left. Across from the stationery store is the famous restaurant. The restaurant has such street foods. Many people visit the restaurant, so sometimes you have to stand in line to eat the food there. I sometimes go there with my close friends when I get allowance from my parents. That's all. Thank you for your listening.
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Most of all, I would connect some of the short sentences in order to vary the writing.

This restaurant carries several kinds of street food such as odeng, tteokbokki, pretzels, beaver tails, waffles, and stick food. Odeng is fish cake which costs 500 won. Both a long odeng and a flat odeng cost 500 won. A tteokbokki is 500 won as well. A bungoeppang costs 500 won. A pretzel is 1,000 won. A beaver tail is 2,000 won. A Brussels waffle is 3,000 won. A fruit stick is 2,000 won. An insect stick costs 2,000 won. A meat stick is 3,000 won. A starfish stick is 1,000 won.

Walk out from the school gate. Turn left and walk a little. Then turn right. You can see a stationery store on your left. Across from the stationery store is the famous restaurant. The restaurant has different kinds of street foods. Many people visit the restaurant, so sometimes you have to stand in line to eat there. I sometimes go there with my close friends when I get allowance from my parents. That's all. Thank you for your listening.