Question
What could you include in a essay about scholarship, character, leadership, citizenship, and service?
Answers
Ms. Sue
I would include all the reasons that these are important to the individual and the community.
Navpreet
Okay, But we have to write it about our self, so like how would we talk about scholarship?
Ms. Sue
So -- what does scholarship mean to you? Have you checked definitions of these words?
Navpreet
Yes, I know what they mean. I'm writing a essay for my NJHS (National's Juniors Honors Society) application. I thought about that but that didn't exactly feel write because I have to persuade the school why I would be great in the NJHS.
Ms. Sue
What have YOU done in these areas that qualify you for NJHS?
Navpreet
Yeah.
I've started it;
(Scholarship)
I usually always make it on the high honor roll. I have also been student of the months in the past years.
(Character)
The golden rule is “Treat others the way you want to be treated”. It’s something I follow, but most times if someone doesn't treat me write I still treat them write.
(Service)
I like to go out and meet new people. Whenever I can, I try to hold doors open for others, help elderly and do anything I can to help out. I am “in charge” of all the little kids. I play with them and teach them, also if they are hungry or tired I get them food or put them to nap. At school I did Art Club, I helped paint the set for the play and painted many more things. I also do Academic Team, I learn so much; mostly every subject is included in the questions. I tried out for Math Counts as well but I didn't make the team. I’m not the best at math but I will try again next year.
I've started it;
(Scholarship)
I usually always make it on the high honor roll. I have also been student of the months in the past years.
(Character)
The golden rule is “Treat others the way you want to be treated”. It’s something I follow, but most times if someone doesn't treat me write I still treat them write.
(Service)
I like to go out and meet new people. Whenever I can, I try to hold doors open for others, help elderly and do anything I can to help out. I am “in charge” of all the little kids. I play with them and teach them, also if they are hungry or tired I get them food or put them to nap. At school I did Art Club, I helped paint the set for the play and painted many more things. I also do Academic Team, I learn so much; mostly every subject is included in the questions. I tried out for Math Counts as well but I didn't make the team. I’m not the best at math but I will try again next year.
Navpreet
right*
Ms. Sue
This essay does not show that you're ready for NJHS.
usually always??
someone doesn't treat me write?
I am “in charge” of all the little kids.?
Where? When?
You need to be more specific.
usually always??
someone doesn't treat me write?
I am “in charge” of all the little kids.?
Where? When?
You need to be more specific.
Navpreet
Most times..
I meant right.
Okay.
I meant right.
Okay.
Navpreet
I usually make it on the high honor roll.
I am “in charge” of all the little kids at church on Sundays.
It’s something I follow, but most times if someone doesn't treat me right, I still treat them right.
I am “in charge” of all the little kids at church on Sundays.
It’s something I follow, but most times if someone doesn't treat me right, I still treat them right.
Eva
I have the same problem ! And my intro's too long... I have a limit of only 700 words! I'm at 400 just with the intro and first body paragraph ! Please help...